Manderby's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Goose vs Louie]

Love the cockfight cameo.

[Elain Gets Adopted]

It must have been invisibl-o who spilled the coffee!

[ENA - Temptation Stairway]

I just don't get it. This series seems to be a cult with many followers but no real content. Does not deserve much of my points.

[THE NAKED STRANGER with Cocko and Gallagher]

I imagine this being on [as] or MTV or something.
And then I imagine you teaming up with weebl.

Oh, joyful thoughts!

[The Birds and The Bees]

What are the last two sentences spoken at 1:50?

- I sound foam I thanks?
- Ew, you wouldn't infinital mans totem?

I really have no idea what they say. Pity.

[New Years Animation]

What's the music track? I immediately recognized the samples and style from Jazz Jackrabbit 2. But mixed in a Dubstep sounds nice.

[How to deal with Furry Cults]

You just read the comments backwards and then you find out that diputs si siht sdaer reveohw.

[Daughter's Revenge (Tales of Alethrion)]

Incredible animation as usual. An feast for all senses.

I was especially impressed at 15:16. That turn was just splendid. Horrifying yes, but splendid.

Deserves all praises.

[PLONK]

You are not there yet. Although giving credit for making an 8 minute long film around an already oversaturated topic - which is not easy - I still have to be rather critical about this film. Hope you can take this as a hint for further improvement. It's ok, but you seem stuck in a dead end.
Your approach to comedy is being funny by design, meaning, all movements are accompanied by a (stock) sound, all characters are extreme and purely stereotypical, the topic itself is pushing something commonly uneventful to hilarious excitement, which feels like begging for acceptance. Why chosing comedy as the mood at all?
The story is not presented too well and had lots of unnecessary things in it. I as a viewer had to take quite some effort to understand what is going on, what is important, what not. Only until the exclamation mark I understood what the story was all about. The frame story was unnecessary (as it is the same story twice) and not embedded smoothly. Either just keep the caveman story (which is the story where things happen) or give both stories a unique purpose.
Also, you seem to mix up the meaning of reason and purpose. Reason is why something happends and purpose is what the result of that happening is in the end. What was the reason for the termites, the reason for the boss having a tiger face, the reason for the squid? What was the purpose of the elderly man talking in the doorstep, the porpose of spilling coffee? Nothing came out of these actions, no reaction whatsoever.
The elderly man and also for example the (stock) psychodelic sequence do not add any more insight. Instead of a psychodelic sequence, a simple nightmare with the chasing sequence of the stalactite would have sufficed and be much more effective. Instead of the elderly man, why not make the ink-plant a side-character. It's the most funny sequence when the plant coughs, so why wasting this opportunity?
Drawings are sketchy, which by itself would fit perfectly, but they are so sketchy, it borders on lazyness. There is almost no movement, close to no cycles, all just exaggerated still images with (again) stock animation smears for fighting, drawing, running. Camera is most of the time too close, give the viewer some space, some context. Add some panning. A simple quick zoom out to the stalactites falling down onto people whould be funny by itself.
Having the main character basically comprising of nothing than a beard, two eyes, two hands and two feet doesn't help in getting the mood across. This may sound harsh, but you should say goodbye to this character, it is not developable.
All in all, you are not there yet. Your style seems to be limited, almost deadlocked, maybe you fell into the trap to tap yourself onto your shoulder too early some years ago and are now stuck with the same style since (which happens to lots of artists). You seem to use only a narrow band of your full creativity. Open up for more techniques, more experiments. Review your story telling, it all comes down to the viewer being guided into what you want to express.

Chalecus responds:

I can see where your opinion comes from.

And to that I say:

lol

[Casting Call]

If there ever was a comeback...