Manderby's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

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Your animation skills are way above average but you do right to accept some critique. In my opinion, what your animation lacks is intention. Give the viewer more hints about what he has to think of the characters, of the situation. Guide him to expect something and let him be surprised when something unexpected happends. But always do everything with intention. For example the dog walking on two legs was unexpected, but what do you do with it then?

Other than that: Using real audio sound from a dog is a very good choice, it shows (hears). Your rigging is top. The dog-eye-iris are a bit too big, you can barely see them moving. Exaggerate all movements a bit. Make it more clownesque. Also, to give the viewer a hint of what your intention is, maybe add some simple camera panning or shifting (but no handcam effect, that's cheap). This gives the scene more depth (as it is 3D). Also a bit cheap: The "censored" walking cycle of the dog on two legs, might seem clever as it is less work but is disappointing for the viewer, as he wants to see the legs moving. The colors and shapes in the background are very saturated and clean which is more cartoonish than the foreground, which is unusual. Clouds are moving too slow, no leafs falling, no bees flying, the environment is a bit lifeless.

But you are on a very good road. Hence the stars. Keep up the good work!

CelestaleSeeds responds:

Thanks for the detailed critique!! I'm surprised you picked up that much detail, most of what you mention was indeed what I was concerning when making this animation, not to making excuses because I made this all by myself, I wanted to test what is the baseline of detail I needed. you were spot-on on all the issues. You have good eyes!

[Lerygow]

We needed dat.

[CUDDLE PARTY with Cocko and Gallagher]

Consistent Voice acting and perfect animation!
I just didn't get the joke at the end.
Guess, I have to be in Australia to get it.

[Beep & Tweet - Sheridan Animated Short Film]

Superb.

[FALLEN GUYS - (Fall Guys Animation - What Actually Happens When You Die)]

The animation is decent, not really that much of a story though.

Main concern: Might I suggest to cut the whole second half where you advertise yourself. Don't just copy the same thing from YouTube and paste it here, it's off-putting. It means: "I did not gain enough traction on YouTube, hence I just slap the same thing here and see what sticks." Put a little effort into publishing your work on different platforms. If you put a small endscreen with a follow-me-on-different-platforms message, that's perfectly fine. But what you showed here just screamed of desperation. It's a small effort which will help you focus more on content and will lead to more comments and in the end followers here on Newgrounds.

beclet responds:

Thank you for the feedback, I haven't posted on Newgrounds before and it didn't actually cross my mind to change that part. I will next time!

[SUS (an Among Us short)]

This is your first animation? Wow, I see a great cinematic animation future ahead!

[Yolklore]

Above averegge.

[Arthur Blorg's Horrible Misfortune]

Your drawing and animation skills are close to some of the greatest seen here on Newgrounds. Way to go!

The sound effects could use some more bite. The story also lacks a bit and the pace is a bit too dragged out sometimes but at the same time sometimes too quick to realize what is happening. You can add some more pauses at the right times and a bit of sillyness in the next video. This one stands as the work it is.

Nontheless you deserve all the stars as this is really a great work!

ShaquilleSaddler responds:

Thank you!! I appreciate the critique! 🙏

[Moles]

I'd scream too.

[Cult Scouts: Sacrifice Badge]

Quite fun and sequels are already awaited. But I dont't get the masks. Why?

ClockworkPixel responds:

Scout uniform